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| Thread ID: 144248 | 2017-08-25 16:31:00 | My new book... | Greg (193) | PC World Chat |
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| 1438551 | 2017-08-25 16:31:00 | ... Here's the start of a book I'm trying to write. Is it utterly pathetic or does it have potential? I'd be interested to know, and... if it does get published, you all will be credited. *hopeful* Daniel Haigh wasn't vague. His newly found friend Timothy Redy wasn't exactly ready. But together they formed an unlikely bond despite their vast differences in upbringing. Dan came from a well-to-do family background; Tim had some limited experience as a trainee dustman. They met when by coinidence both were shopping for some Mary Jane at a local dealer. They started talking when each was surprised by the uprise in prices of their medicine, each was perturbed about where this lousy economy would lead. Here's my tech centre. It comprises of... this computer. It's a good notebook thing made by Toshiba. It works well and the shiney bright lit keys is a tasty touch. Alongside this shiney bright is a mouse mat. No mouse should ever be without one. Next to that is a remote controler... ye gads and stink fish (I'm sure you've heard that phrase before) this is no normal work station... its an uber station, with close-to para-normal facilities! Bring on Douglas Adams, the SuperSonic man who represented Pink Floyd in the alter jazz syndrome and was great in his lifetime. Back to now... an eight gigabyte disting – a disting is a something what is otherwise indescribable... There's a mobile phone... a Samsung (I think samsung would prefer me to capatilise its name)... but nah, **** it.. its just a bloody samsung Korean or Chinese or whatever ****ing mobile phone. But I have to say this... it works bloody well even after being knocked about and dropped so many times that even the best memory cards in the world can't recall. It has so many kinks on it that even The Kinks wouldn't recognise it. My friend (for a short while) Ian Middleton wrote something along the lines that a day in Japan is worth a lifetime in any other place on this planet. (I worked for him briefly as a volunteer for the Royal New Zealand Foundation for the Blind). Back to my “desktop”. A memory stick... that's what some call it. Its got about 16 gigs capacity. Not too bad for a little thing that can contain almost the number of stars in the viewable universe. I have a clock on my desktop. It's a mild thing which doesn't interfere too much with my daily life. Although having said that, it bloody well wakes me up when I have to meet an appointment. I hate time and this bloody clock is an f'ing reminder that we're all surrounded by time restraints1 Grr. Moving on... another damn thing on my work space is... insect killer. I, and I'm sure many like me, have insect pests in the house. I have three bottles in my downstairs part of this ****-hole house I live in. One in my laundry area, one in the kitchen and one right here where I can kill any pieces of **** insects which invade my space. |
Greg (193) | ||
| 1438552 | 2017-08-25 20:05:00 | What's the first para got to do with the rest of the ramblings? Shouldn't it link in or, be placed after your dissertation on your office setup? | Bryan (147) | ||
| 1438553 | 2017-08-25 20:43:00 | The silly names is just - silly. shiney - spelling mistake, editors won't like that. ye gads and stink fish - or that. Bring on Douglas Adams, the SuperSonic man who represented Pink Floyd in the alter jazz syndrome and was great in his lifetime. And that is just rambling and unnecessary. . an eight gigabyte disting – a disting is a something what is otherwise indescribable... Also unnecessary and rambling. Skip made up words and explanations you then have to make. There's a mobile phone... a Samsung (I think samsung would prefer me to capatilise its name).. More rambling (I worked for him briefly as a volunteer for the Royal New Zealand Foundation for the Blind). And that. Back to my “desktop”. A memory stick... that's what some call it. Its got about 16 gigs capacity. Not too bad for a little thing that can contain almost the number of stars in the viewable universe. I have a clock on my desktop. It's a mild thing which doesn't interfere too much with my daily life. Although having said that, it bloody well wakes me up when I have to meet an appointment. I hate time and this bloody clock is an f'ing reminder that we're all surrounded by time restraints1 Grr. Moving on... another damn thing on my work space is... insect killer. I, and I'm sure many like me, have insect pests in the house. I have three bottles in my downstairs part of this ****-hole house I live in. One in my laundry area, one in the kitchen and one right here where I can kill any pieces of **** insects which invade my space. Actually most of it. I recommend you get a couple of books on writing, there are lots around - by successful authors, that is. Ignore self published anything or names you have never heard of. And find some sites. Do you read much yourself? Do it. Read short stories too, it teaches you to make a point in as few words as possible, to describe the situation with a minimum of description, but enough so that the reader is then 1)Captured and encouraged to continue reading 2)Able to picture the characters/scene immediately And there needs to be a point. First you go on about 2 friends buying drugs, next it's some hardware description. Then you start on bugs. Get to the point. Stories should have a defined beginning, middle and end. Sure you can insert background in novels, but it must be relevant. So, so far, back to the drawing board. I can tell you that publishers get a huge number of manuscripts across their desks, and the slush pile is enormous. If the start doesn't catch them, they won't even bother reading the rest. |
pctek (84) | ||
| 1438554 | 2017-08-25 22:57:00 | What you have written is a bit incongruous - for a novel. But may be OK as brief paragraph insights, thoughts, or ramblings for a blog. As noted above not structured in the traditional sense of a novel, which may include many chapters. There are online spell and grammar checkers to check your content and some make changes. Software exists where it can help by rewording/recommending changes to your written content. I have written 100's of lengthy articles/stories for the internet, starting as I thought as short novels, and submitted them at article directories (www.thetoptens.com), where you can get rated by others. Perhaps start there. Or create your own blog (Blogger is easy to set up) and write there (it's what I did - but split my lengthy articles across several blogs and my own websites)- either as a seines of articles/thoughts and tutorials. Well known thought articles are Leo's Blog (www.actualized.org) and the thoughtful Seths Blog. (http://sethgodin.typepad.com/). I admit I did it for money through various ad platforms, but still get good comments today for articles I wrote years ago. Depends on your goal too - simply to write, or gain subscribers, recognition online or whatever. Sometimes you need a internet (and social) presence or some kind of authority if you want your writings to be seen online So many content writers, authors, content publishers online to contend with. Many eBook/Novel publishers have established some kind of authority online (and offline for authors), e.g with their blogs, sites, social media, etc. Content (of all sorts) can be easily made, adapted, corrected, restructured, but difficult to find online,without authority or promotion, because of the vast and constant content flow from experienced others. |
kahawai chaser (3545) | ||
| 1438555 | 2017-08-25 22:57:00 | You seem to have 2 stories . The first: Daniel Haigh wasn't vague . His newly found friend Timothy Redy wasn't exactly ready . But together they formed an unlikely bond despite their vast differences in upbringing . Dan came from a well-to-do family; Tim had some experience as a dustman . They met when by coincidence, both were shopping for medical marijuana . They started talking about yet another increase in price of their medicine . The second is a badly written description of stuff at your place . Stick with the first . And now there should be a point, why the story about the 2 guys . . . . Paragraph 2 would lead into what is going to happen with them . . . . |
pctek (84) | ||
| 1438556 | 2017-08-25 23:04:00 | Don’t know what you’re smoking Greg, but we’re all going to need some to keep up. :confused: | B.M. (505) | ||
| 1438557 | 2017-08-26 00:12:00 | I get the feeling they think you're serious Greg. I think it is bloody good, though it could well be mistaken for Labour Party policy. | Richard (739) | ||
| 1438558 | 2017-08-26 03:09:00 | I get the feeling they think you're serious Greg. I think it is bloody good, though it could well be mistaken for Labour Party policy. I gained the impression Greg was trying to get a job as Trump's speechmaker, if not coaching the Donald in Rambling 101. |
WalOne (4202) | ||
| 1438559 | 2017-08-26 08:49:00 | I get the feeling they think you're serious Greg. I think it is bloody good, though it could well be mistaken for Labour Party policy. You may not win a Pulitzer prize, maybe aim for the Man Booker prize. IMHO it's every bit as good as some of those I've seen. You could also become New Zealand's Poet Laureate. Stand by for an approach from TVNZ or a Hollywood script writer. |
Marnie (4574) | ||
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