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| Thread ID: 108107 | 2010-03-14 06:11:00 | Cover Letter Checking | Renmoo (66) | PC World Chat |
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| 867079 | 2010-04-02 09:57:00 | Well done, Marnie! That's simpler & keeps the meaning. If I were to put on my old sub-editor's hat, I might be even tougher ( on the "never use a long word when a shorter word will do" principle). I'd drop "duties." Tasks is adequate on its own. "Provided me with" could become "have given me," which is more conversational & not so formal. And the last sentence - "This experience will help me as an intern pharmacist." Just a few more ideas, Jamuz... to keep or ignore. |
Laura (43) | ||
| 867080 | 2010-04-03 00:47:00 | I have already used "have given me" a few instances down the letter, so I will stick with "provided me with". Thanks Marnie and Laura :) |
Renmoo (66) | ||
| 867081 | 2010-04-03 10:58:00 | Right topic but wrong country bro. | roddy_boy (4115) | ||
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